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Post by egyptiankiwi on Sept 17, 2006 22:11:46 GMT -5
"Underneath this Smile" I really liked that one caroline. I like sad songs and poems and stuff...they're so...sad...they make me ache inside. But they're so pretty. Yours was very nice. I want to read more of your poems...so you need to write more. ;D Lots more. ;D
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Post by NightStarFairy on Sept 19, 2006 10:57:26 GMT -5
To DragonDrake: Hm, I never noticed that. I guess I was trying to say that the rain drop was landing on the flower. Thanks for pointing that out.
To egyptiankiwi: Thanks you, I'm glad you liked it ;D.
I'll have more stuff soon, I'm editing alot of my stuff. (and writing new stuff) Ok, here is my new poem, I don't have a title for it yet. Let me know what ya'll think.
Thousands of tears I've cried You don't know what goes on inside And all the pain I go thru. All the hope you gave me was just a lie, And I'm falling forever because of you. I was a fool to belive the words you told me I hate myself for trusting you. I can't got back now and erase the scars, I'm going under because of you.
That was alot longer on the paper, lol.
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Iornor
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Post by Iornor on Sept 19, 2006 18:00:17 GMT -5
I like that one its good
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Post by egyptiankiwi on Sept 19, 2006 18:44:56 GMT -5
Oh! its gonna make me cry!!!! But i love it.
............oh wow. I didn't cry.
....Hmmm.
Anyway. Very good caroline.
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Post by Dragondrake on Jan 8, 2007 21:57:45 GMT -5
Wow, lots of bitterness portayed in so few words. It was fairly good. Keep it up.
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Post by NightStarFairy on Jan 14, 2007 20:44:45 GMT -5
Thank you, I'm glad ya'll liked that one.
I have something to post! I haven't posted any of my work in awhile. and my writing folder is a mess.... but anyways. I wrote this poem a long while back, and it's where I got my screen name from.
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The Fairy Night Song
There's a fairy night song, That she sings to me.
Stay awake, listen well, See the fairy's far off, Dancing with glee.
Very quietly, We creep up to see, But make no noise, They scare easily.
Can you see the fairy ring? Look at them dance, How their wings flutter, All different colors of the fairy's.
But come, We must go, For dawn soon comes, And the fairy's will leave.
We will come back tomorrow, And later you can sing, The Fairy Night song, That she sings to me.
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Post by Dragondrake on Jan 15, 2007 16:34:50 GMT -5
Okay, kewl. Where did the star part come from?
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Post by Iornor on Jan 20, 2007 4:53:40 GMT -5
ha! and you said you were not good, I loved it!
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Post by The Deecho on Jan 22, 2007 15:12:29 GMT -5
ha! Exactly. I loved it too.
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Post by egyptiankiwi on Jan 31, 2007 17:55:35 GMT -5
;D Me too
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Post by NightStarFairy on Feb 2, 2007 18:17:13 GMT -5
Thank you ;D. To answer your question DragonDrake, I added star because it was night time.
New Poem!!!!!!!!!!! it doesn't have a name yet....
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I wish I knew, I had been so wrong In all the darkness I had prolonged.
All the fear and blame that too my soul away, And all the tears I've cried.
I wish I knew, I had been so wrong. All the lies I wish I never told.
The darkness will not subside, And you were never mine.
Feeling shattered, Hope was gone,
I wish I knew I had been so wrong.
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Post by The Deecho on Feb 2, 2007 18:39:12 GMT -5
Preeetttttyyyyyyy. *starry-eyed*
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Post by Iornor on Feb 3, 2007 0:05:34 GMT -5
*sbiff* I liked this one alot, very touching
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Post by egyptiankiwi on Feb 3, 2007 13:49:59 GMT -5
Oooo so sad. I loved it of course.
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Post by NightStarFairy on Mar 3, 2007 23:09:27 GMT -5
THank you everyone! I'm sorry I haven't posted anything in a long while... but here's a short one I wrote a little while back! sorry it's short.
It's called Spider Queen
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Such a beautiful thing.
Leaves you hanging
In a web of dreams
Softly she calls
For you to come near
And silently traps you
In a web of fear.
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