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Post by The Deecho on Apr 6, 2006 19:25:52 GMT -5
good good.
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Post by NightStarFairy on Apr 6, 2006 20:00:42 GMT -5
New Poem!!!
His Dreams.
People call him crazy,
And others say he's mad
No body believe's him
And the dreams he has.
In his dreams
There is a door,
And he's running from something he doesn't know.
Every night he dreams the same thing,
Running in darkness
Away from that thing.
Always the same voices inside his head
Telling him to open the door.
Running in darkness were he can't see,
With voices telling him
That's what he goes there for
To unlock the door.
I hope you like it, Wrote this one awhile back to.
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Post by The Deecho on Apr 7, 2006 17:16:01 GMT -5
VERY NICE! I THINK I REMEMBER READING THAT ONE AWHILE BACK AT THE PARK  |
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Post by NightStarFairy on Apr 7, 2006 17:20:40 GMT -5
Yes, I showed that one at the park awhile ago. And thanks.
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Post by naughtyelf on Apr 10, 2006 20:58:04 GMT -5
not bad, not bad at all.  |
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Post by NightStarFairy on May 10, 2006 23:07:18 GMT -5
^thanks.
Just to let you people's know, I shall be posting a new peom sometime soonish, probably tomorrow. I have about 3 or 4 that I will probably post. or... more like 3 cause I need to fix one of them... but yea, I shall post soon.
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Post by The Deecho on May 12, 2006 13:42:02 GMT -5
Gaaaaa!!! And here I was hoping that the new post in 'Creative Writing' would be a new poem. So there I went, clicking with hopes of - Nooooooooooooo! Oh well, I shall wait and be patient about it.  |
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Post by NightStarFairy on May 12, 2006 16:22:07 GMT -5
I'm so sorry, lol. I have one now, actally two, which I shall now post. Well, there not actally poems..... I don't think. But here ya are. They don't have titles just to let you know. *Tears fall down my face, Like rain drops unto a flower, Everything is so dark and deary, I just don't want to know* and the second one.... *Lonely is black, Like a dark rose in the night's sky, It flutters through my spirit, Unloved and alone. As I cry the cold wind whips away my tears that fall.* Meh, I don't really like them. I had to write them for my writing class. Anyways, let me know how you like them, an dI will post more soon cause I have to teak my other two that I'm writing. *Walks into the mist* Oh, I'm done editing my other 2 poems, I will post them soon  . |
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Post by The Deecho on May 13, 2006 10:37:39 GMT -5
They're short, but I love them ;D Especially the second |
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Post by NightStarFairy on May 13, 2006 11:31:48 GMT -5
Thank you, there short little poems I had to do for class, but I like how they came out ;D.
and I got some peoms to post if anyone's interested.
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Post by The Deecho on Jul 28, 2006 11:38:19 GMT -5
Yes of course we're interested! Post! POST post POST post POST! Come on, people, chant with me!! POST post POST post.............
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Post by NightStarFairy on Jul 28, 2006 17:07:04 GMT -5
Oh my, I haven't posted in here for a while, I'm sorry for such a long wait! I wrote this awhile ago, I'm very pleased with it. I have alot of peoms I'm fixing right now, so I'll have alot more to post! I hope you like this one.
Fragrance
The wind blows thru the tree's,
And the leaves softly whisper.
As I lay there under the tree,
I listen to the wind blow around me.
Looking at the roses along side of me,
I pick one and hold it in my hand.
As I close my eyes and breathe in it's fragrance,
I remember when I was young.
Letting the wind take me home,
I look around and promise to come back another day.
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Post by The Deecho on Aug 8, 2006 17:53:14 GMT -5
I like it. It's very pleasant. ;D
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Post by NightStarFairy on Aug 10, 2006 0:37:46 GMT -5
Thank you  . Ahem, here's a new one. err.... wait, I'm not done with this one. Aha, here's one I finished. I wrote it awhile ago. Underneath This SmileUnderneath this smile I am broken on the inside, And no one sees the pain. Alone in the dark, I am silently slipping away. I never used to cry, I was strong inside. But now I am alone, With no one there for me. Underneath this smile, You will never get to see. |
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Post by Dragondrake on Sept 3, 2006 0:44:33 GMT -5
*Tears fall down my face, Like rain drops unto a flower, Everything is so dark and deary, I just don't want to know* *Lonely is black, Like a dark rose in the night's sky, It flutters through my spirit, Unloved and alone. As I cry the cold wind whips away my tears that fall.* I like these two, but I have a question about the first. You say "like rain drops unto a flower," I'm not meaning to change your poem in any way, but out of interest I wonder, isn't 'onto' a more fitting word? 'Unto' usually means 'to' or 'until'. Using the former definition, I usually see it meaning a give-take relation (like "I bestow unto you...blah blah blah") So, I guess my question is, is the raindrop landing on the flower, or 'going to the flower'? |
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