Dark Icelord's Poems

[Dark Icelord]

What an original name for the thread don't you think? lol. Anyway, here is a poem I wrote about a week ago. I hope you like it.

Light and Darkness by Matthew a.k.a. Dark Icelord

I can feel sorrow deep in my soul.
I shine in the light but I'm lost in the darkness.
My fire has been extinguished.
All I feel now is emptiness.
I know you can see me.
But you just walk past me.
I know you can help me.
But you just leave me in my own despair.
I can't find my way without you.
You are my light and my hope.
Without you I am lost.
Lost in my own darkness.
Doomed to wander my soul for eternity.
Without you I am lost... eternally.

[Mimori]

Matthew, it's terrible. Just horrible, I can't believe you actually posted that, it's just terrible!

... Just kidding sweetie!

It's well written darling. Depressing, Emotional, kind of like a "ghost"... I can relate with it anyways. So it's very touching really...Thanks for sharing it doll, hope you share more

[Dark Icelord]

Well I felt depressed when I wrote it. But I don't feel that way right now. ;D

But thanks though, for saying it was good I mean. And I will share more if I ever think of any more.

[aiedail]

That's pretty good!! I like it!!!! Keep writing, but don't get to depressed!!! lol

[The Deecho]

I liked it a lot, felt a depth about it. Keep writing more!!!

[Dragondrake]

My, my. It was kewl. I didn't expect those blues to come from you, but it pretty good. Kudos. Shall we see more?

[Dark Icelord]

dragondrake said:

My my.

OK, for one, you just spammed in a poem thread, which everyone here knows creates problems with a lot people. And two, is your post supposed to mean anything at all? Because the only way I can interpret your post in as an insult. I mean really, how am I supposed to take "my my" as a non-insulting statement? If you liked it then you should have posted more. See, the only real way I can take that is you were at a loss for words (which if you are, you really shouldn't be posting) because, A: You thought it was bad or something like that, or B: you thought it was really super awsome. Really, if you want to actually make a comment then make one, if you just want to spam for free posts then might I suggest maybe leaving Green Games and going to some other web site that would actually allow you to do that.

[Dragondrake]

Sorry, meant no offense with my short post. I was just thinking "My, my," because I'm wondering whom it is written about. Strong words for a young Icelord.

There, I fixed up my post.

I think this is my favourite part:
I know you can help me.
But you just leave me in my own despair.

[NightStarFairy]

I like it, there's a sense of alot of sadness you can feel when you read it. Good job, looking foward to more!

[Touchstone]

I like it a lot!!! It would make a great song!!! Great job!!!

[Dark Icelord]

touchstone said:

I like it a lot!!! It would make a great song!!! Great job!!!

Actually, I have thought about turning some of my poems into songs. I would just have to compose me some music... Anyway, thank you all for your complements.

dragondrake said:

Strong words for a young Icelord.

You do know your only a little more than a year older than me don't you?

Well, I have written some more poems so I thought I would share one with all of you. I haven't named it so I guess I'll just make up a name.

Wisdom by Matthew a.k.a. Dark Icelord

The time to act is a small one.
It takes many by surprise, and most people have the knowledge to do what's right.
Why don't they use their knowledge?
Why don't people do what they know is right?
Why do people fail to act with wisdom?
The world has darkened.
The veil of evil has cast it's shadow upon the world.
But we can't give up hope.
We have to live to fight the evil.
We have to stand up to the darkness, and shine our light on the world.
Because if we don't, then the evil will truly win.
We must defeat the evil.
If we don't, then who will.

[The Dracolyte]

Ahh poems, how I have neglected thee..... Well I really like these poems(and I'm not just saying that since we are related ). I like them both alot, I think your second one is very insightful. And I agree, the first one does sound very sad(in the emotion sense, not in the sense of a lack of skill). I think you have skill at writing poems.

[Dragondrake]

I think your first one had a lot more rythm, but your second one makes a nice point.

And yes, I know you're little younger than me, but its still fun to tease.

[egyptiankiwi]

Wow, i really liked those. My favorite is Light and Darkness...i love poems that draw me into their depths like that; and i like the impact the last two lines have.