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Post by The Galator on May 24, 2007 23:45:45 GMT -5
i love your poem chloe!!!!!! it is awesome!!
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Post by nakia on May 25, 2007 11:54:06 GMT -5
Thanks Sarah!
Here is another. I hope you like it!
Storm
The snow falls….covering the ground in endless winter The wind carries precious secrets to the spider spinning her web The lightening crashes through the sky, showering golden memories on the land The rain dashes the rose The storm bitterly rages into the night, wonderful and wild
The snow tears through the sky, dancing with the tempest The wind escapes into the night, free…wild The lightening turns the sky into a golden silk The rain whispers to the dragon fly, as he shelters his emerald wings from the gale The storm is gone…….silence…alone
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Post by Touchstone on Jun 6, 2007 16:50:25 GMT -5
you are an amazing poet! watch out Emily Dickinson and Robert Frost, here comes Chloe!
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Post by nakia on Jun 6, 2007 17:49:46 GMT -5
O my you are exaggerating!! lol Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
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Post by aiedail on Jun 11, 2007 22:43:08 GMT -5
oooooooooooooo!!!!!!! it's beautiful!!!! i love the winter!!!!! i really like it chloe! keep it up!!!!!!
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Post by nakia on Jun 12, 2007 13:50:55 GMT -5
Thanks Hannah!! You should write more!!! Your other one was really cool!
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Post by aiedail on Jun 13, 2007 0:46:17 GMT -5
i'm trying to write one, but i kinda lost it in all the clutter of my room. *blushes* i'll try to finish it.
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Post by nakia on Jun 14, 2007 10:28:15 GMT -5
Yes finish it soon!!!!!
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Post by Dragondrake on Jun 15, 2007 12:14:51 GMT -5
Ooh, sweet poem. I think this is the most illustrative poem yet. I could sense the river's tears, and everything else. Good job.
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Post by nakia on Jun 15, 2007 22:34:49 GMT -5
Thank you, I am Really glad you liked it.
This one is kinda short. I hope you like it!
Memoirs of the sea
Indigo, emerald, and violet Clear as the star in the sky Always shinning of pure crystal blue as the sun beats down as an ally
dashing against the rugged cliffs Throwing haze to the blue Savagely folding her wave Into the icy blue
The sky cries tears down on the sea The lightening splits through the sky The storm makes the ocean wild and free Her tranquil self says goodbye
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Post by Dark Icelord on Jun 15, 2007 23:50:16 GMT -5
*cough*doublepost*cough* Hmm, it was very interesting. Not bad. I did think it was kind of weird how you rhymed blue with blue. Other than that though, very nice. Me ;D and my alter ego give it a total of two thumbs up. Keep writing. *cough*don'tdoublepostagain*cough* Sorry, I think I might be coming down with something...
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Post by nakia on Jun 16, 2007 1:08:57 GMT -5
*cough*what doublepost?*cough*
Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it!
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Post by aiedail on Jun 16, 2007 15:48:02 GMT -5
I really like it chloe! you're a good poet!!
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Post by nakia on Jun 17, 2007 12:16:59 GMT -5
Thanks Hannah! I'm glad you liked. I really want to read your new one!!!
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Post by NightStarFairy on Jun 17, 2007 23:04:52 GMT -5
I really like the winter poem!! Nice way to express winter.
And Memoirs of the Sea was good! I liked how you rhymed blue.
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